Talk:Privacy Green Paper Response

I don't think you need to ome up with the painful examples of " The steps involved in getting data out of services are tedious and onerous. " For the readers here, simply assert the steps are tedious and onerous.

With these three examples, i would keep it to simple assertions of the problems as you have done with the first:

1. Where export is available it is often not machine readable. Export involving steps must be manually repeated monthly as statements are issued.

I would restate

2. Simple Internet Open Standards like OAuth allow for account linking without the dangerous practice of giving a username and password to various service providers. Instead, and OAuth token is issued, and username and PW are passed only to the issuing party.

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2. when another company wants to help you derive value from your data, such as a program to determine from your calling patterns what cell phone service would be best for you, you must often reveal your account credentials to this third party, creating a risk of abuse.

And restate

3. Portability of data is also import where a business fails and people need to move it to an alternative and hopefully more viable provider.

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3. When data is not portable, it is challenging to move from one service to another, particularly when a service might from a failing company, or one that no longer wishes to serve a particular market.